tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8976231959701294320.post408446315691054578..comments2023-10-02T07:07:53.618-07:00Comments on Das Film Blog: Triple Whammy: Harry Potter, Outrage, and Scott PilgrimTristan Bass-Kruegerhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/16431738051527205475noreply@blogger.comBlogger1125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8976231959701294320.post-88733981414322963102010-12-06T18:27:49.974-08:002010-12-06T18:27:49.974-08:00As far as the Scott Pilgrim review goes, it's ...As far as the Scott Pilgrim review goes, it's a good start but it needs some work. Have you considered for example, who is your target audience for these reviews? Is it just the general population, or people who watch a lot of movies, or what? For example, I've never heard of the movie 'kick ass' before and so the rant at the beginning is completely lost on me, and makes me lose interest in the review. You could compare or contrast it to 'kick ass' at the end of the review after you've already got the reader's attention, or go into more detail about what the differences were. Just saying, 'if only for the fact that I did not at all like Kick-Ass whereas I very much liked Scott Pilgrim.' doesn't inform the reader. Throw out some adjectives and give us your honest succinct opinion including WHY you did or didn't like them. Or else just leave the comparison out of the review because as it is it more detracts than adds from it. or compare it to more than one movie so that a larger audience can relate. Maybe 'Run Lola Run'? Well, that's a bit of a stretch. I guess there aren't a lot of movies like Scott Pilgrim, which is probably why I liked it so much.<br /><br />Later on your writing is both more eloquent and relevant when you say things like, 'The point I'm trying to get at is that Scott Pilgrim is a movie told with so much joy that it should appeal even to people who don't identify with Michael Cera awkwardness.' Just a suggestion, but wouldn't that be a better opening statement? Also, this sentence, "And me who had so wrongly thought that Scott Pilgrim was a good movie because of its heart, humor, and exuberance." would be a great first line, if maybe without the sarcasm. But don't bury your observations in the middle of your review. Put them up front where more people will see them. So I would basically say that the structure of your review is the big problem. This reads more like an unedited conversation where you're thinking out loud, which isn't always a bad thing, but I think that your general observations would work better first rather than last. Also, don't lie to your readers. You're trying to earn their respect and attention, and that's not a good way to earn trust. Make jokes at the movie, other reviews, other movies, or even yourself but don't waste the reader's time or misrepresent yourself in any way. You won't earn fans that way. Just give us your honest opinion. If you have something to say then say it. Don't pull your punches and mention a movie you don't like without telling us why. I'd rather read 10 pages of why you hated some other movie then to have you mention it and not follow-through. At least that way I would have learned something about some other movie, for better or worse.Jeffhttp://www.fightinbabesdoinit.com/noreply@blogger.com